Okiedokie, so Yejoon and Shelby just finished giving me some awesome feedback on my second short story. Apparently it wasn't as bad as I thought, both of them really liked the action parts and the descriptions. Shelby, as usual, broke my soul with her harsh words, but I'm used to it. :P
Ok, so last story it was my habit of "And then", and this story it was commas, but every story I seem to have one huge trouble spot! This time there were so many commas missing throughout my entire story it just wasn't even funny. D: But yes, my editing partners helped me find where the commas should go!
Thank you Shelby and Yejoon for awesome feedback! I can't wait to edit my draft now. ^^
--LeXa--
awesome :)
ReplyDeleteAw... Thank you, Lea! You're so sweet! (Once in a blue moon, cough) Anyway, I'm sorry that I broke your puny soul, but I couldn't resist. :D
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ReplyDeleteSounds like it was a great read. Interesting that you talk of commas, after we looked at the article today.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your second story, possibly even more than the first. I hope you will consider the slight changes I suggested. I want to find out more about all three of these "people". I hope there will be more than 3 chapters in this series.
ReplyDeleteYay! :D I'm glad you liked it. I hope there will be more than three chapters too. Thanks for the comments and stuff! ^^
ReplyDeleteI really think you can make this into a short novel. The bones are there. And, you can have illustrations, too. I would love to see R. Andrew fighting the squirrels! :)
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